I tried to write a 4 Page Comic script a while ago. It’s a mix of a space (or extra dimensional to be correct) adventure and comedy.
And well now I am posting it here.
I’m always open to feedback.
Jim Hugger and the Artifact
PAGE 1 – 5 PANELS
A panel of Jim Hugger standing in front of an oval portal. The inside of the portal is swirling with some blueish liquid. He wears tight suit (think spandex or the suit you see motorcycle racers wear) covering his whole body. On his left chest we see a globe -like symbol. His face is visible through a plastic window in the equally tight helm.
|JIM HUGGER:||I am Bim|
|Actually, it is Jim Hugger, but something tells me these guys don’t really care.|
An army of wolf heads looking at the reader. Their bodies are round like a ball and they stand on two feet. We only see them from the shoulders up. The pack leader stands closer than the rest. When the pack leader talks it comes from his belly (off panel).
|Greetings Bim. What brings you to our realm.|
Picture from the side. On the left we see the pack leader with his flock behind him. On the Pack leader and the flock’s belly we see a big mouth forming. They smile. On the right we see Jim Hugger with the portal behind him. Jim Hugger looks down at the belly.
|That’s just creepier than spaghetti coming to life mid-meal.|
|JIM HUGGER:||I’m searching for an artifact of personal value that might have found its way to your beautiful realm.|
A picture of the Pack leader’s full body. The pack leader smiles gruesomely and rubs his hands against each other (which are above his face because his face is on his belly).
A zoomed out image of the floating rock this scene takes place on. Except for the pack and Jim Hugger the floating rock is filled with corpses of different shapes (some are even human like). In the vast space around the floating rock there are other similar rocks floating around in the emptiness.
|PACK LEADER:||We don’t do beautiful here.|
PAGE 2 – 7 PANELS
ART NOTE: Panel 3 is positioned in the top left corner of Panel 5. Panel 4 is positioned in the top right corner of Panel 5. Panel 6 is positioned in the lower left corner of Panel 5. Panel 7 is positioned in the right lower corner of Panel 5.
Picture from behind Jim Hugger. The pack leader looks over Jim Hugger’s shoulder (or because their faces are so far down, he actually looks beside Jim). Jim looks back. He looks clueless.
|PACK LEADER:||Did your said artifact come from that shimmering door you came from?|
|Play it cool|
Jim scratches the back of his head. He smiles and looks as innocent as a guilty person person with no poker face can look.
|JIM HUGGER:||You mean that weird thing behind me, never seen it before in my entire life.|
PANEL 3 (SMALL PANEL)
Panel 3 is positioned in the top left corner of Panel 5. A zoom in on the pack leader’s face. Only the face.
|PACK LEADER:||You’re a terrible liar Bim. Even for an E.G.O. abomination.|
PANEL 4 (SMALL PANEL)
Panel 4 is positioned in the top right corner of Panel 5. A zoom in on Jim Hugger’s face.
|JIM HUGGER:||I prefer Extradimensional Guardian of Order.|
Panel 3 is positioned in the top left corner of Panel 5. Panel 4 is positioned in the top right corner of Panel 5. Panel 6 is positioned in the lower left corner of Panel 5. Panel 7 is positioned in the right lower corner of Panel 5.
We see the whole pack rubbing their hands. The pack leader is seen the clearest and from the rest we mostly see smiles and small glimmering eyes.
|PACK LEADER:||We prefer to call you appetizer for whatever hides behind that door.|
Panel 6 is positioned in the lower left corner of Panel 5. A close-up of the pack leader with his wolf head shot of (you see the shoulders and the blood gushing out from the “neck”.
|PACK LEADER:||My ears!|
Panel 7 is positioned in the right lower corner of Panel 5. A close-up of Jim Hugger pointing a gun at the reader. His right eye brow is raised in a confused look.
|Sooo not the brain.|
PAGE 3 – 6 PANELSPANEL 1
Jim Hugger jumps on top of the pack leader. He directs his gun towards the globe-like body and fires rapidly. With his free hand he pulls out another gun.
|PACK LEADER:||KILL HIM!|
Jim Hugger flies above the next wolf/monster in the pack in a somersault all while continuing to shoot the next wolf/monster and the pack leader. The pack leader laughs as the rounds flies through his body.
|JIM HUGGER:||Where is your brain?|
|PACK LEADER:||Ha ha! We have no brain.|
Jim Hugger lands. He slams his elbow into the eyes of the wolf/monster behind him.
|JIM HUGGER:||Those words make me happier than when I realized Santa is real.|
|BOTH GUNS:||ROUNDS SET TO EXPLODE|
The Pack leader attacks Jim Hugger with his clawed fists. Jim Hugger shots one to the right of him while dodging the Pack leader’s fists by leaning backwards. While leaning backwards he sees something yellow on the ground. The wolf/monster hit by the bullet splashes into tissue and blood.
|PACK LEADER:||You sound like an idiot|
|JIM HUGGER:||Says the one without a brai…|
Jim Hugger supports himself on his hands (the guns are still in his hands) while throwing his body over his head. Jim’s right hand is where the yellow artifact was. The pack leader is thrown over Jim when Jim grabs him with his feet.
Jim runs towards the portal. He shots at everything coming close to him and everything hit by bullet explodes.
|JIM HUGGER:||I’m sorry to leave early, but you know duty calls.|
PAGE 4 – 7 PANELSPANEL 1
Jim Hugger throws himself at the gate and turns 180 degrees mid-air to continue the fire at his enemies
Jim Hugger flies out of the door into a cozy living room. He pushes a button on pedestal right in front of the portal.
Jim Hugger holds his tight helm in his hands. He shouts out with a smile. Behind him we see the portal closing and the Pack leader screaming in fury.
|JIM HUGGER:||Tina, I’m back.|
|PACK LEADER:||I’ll find you Bim. I will kill you!|
Tina Hugger comes flying into the living room through a door at the end of the living room. She is pissed. Little Simon Hugger hangs in his mother’s arms. Simon looks at his mother with wide eyes.
|TINA HUGGER:||Where have you been?!|
Close-up of Jim’s and Tina’s face. Jim smiles between them he holds up a yellow pacifier. Simon Hugger hangs in between them stretching his arms for the pacifier. Tina scream and looks furious at Jim.
|JIM HUGGER:||I was looking for the pacifier.|
|TINA HUGGER:||I told you it was a total waste of time!|
|JIM HUGGER:||You said I did not have to, and I extrapolated.|
Tina Hugger throws Simon into Jim’s arms. Simon grabs the pacifier from his father with a gleeful smile.
|TINA HUGGER:||You’re impossible Jim!|
|JIM HUGGER:||I love you too honey.|
Jim Hugger holding Simon Hugger in his arms while the child happily suckles the pacifier. Simon caresses Simon’s cheek.
|JIM HUGGER:||Don’t you think so Simon? Mommy loves daddy very much.|
© David Johansson 2020